Melt a failure of the treaty of Versailles,
In a bowl of fascism,
Knead in the powerless League of Nations,
And add a pinch of Hitler, Mussolini and Stalin,
Spread Europe with a thick layer of an appeasement,
And blend slowly,
Until brimming with German aggression,
Garnish with a declaration of war,
And sprinkle with a pinch of Japanese aggression,
Bake until golden to have WWII.
In a bowl of fascism,
Knead in the powerless League of Nations,
And add a pinch of Hitler, Mussolini and Stalin,
Spread Europe with a thick layer of an appeasement,
And blend slowly,
Until brimming with German aggression,
Garnish with a declaration of war,
And sprinkle with a pinch of Japanese aggression,
Bake until golden to have WWII.
9 comments:
Jemima,
I love your poem!!! I like the way you use cooking adjectives to the WWII nouns. I also like the last line, because it's a nice ending and is like a real recipe!
Good Job!
Kaveen
I think your recipe was really good. I like the way you involved all the things that caused WWII to happen, as well as some other things, like appeasement. I think that at the end, the idea of baking until golden has a bit of a positive connotation while WWII was quite a bad thing. But over all I think you did a really nice job.
I think you have used a lot of good ideas in this piece i.e a bowl of fascism was a very good idea and it actually sounds like an actual recipe. I really like the last line where you say "bake golden to have WWII" becuase it adds this image like as if the i have a cake but its not a cake. Good job
Jemima I really liked how you got to the point and didn't waist time with unneeded words and space. i also liked the word choice such as sprinkle, brimming, and pinch. Over all I think this is a very well written poem.
Jemima...
I really liked your poem. It's short but vivid and I think the structure of the poem made it more poetic. Your detailed word choices made the poem more poetic and really made it sound like a cooking recipe. GOOD JOB!
HyeJin...
I think that your poem is really well made because it sends the reader an important message and how the war started even though it may not be super long. I actually liked your poem because it's very concise and easy to read.
overall good job!! :)
wow very interesting poem! it really shows a great sence of understanding of the reasons WW2 began. Also, i like how you used all of the descriptive cooking terms, it really makes it sound like a recipe. finally i like the last line, it pulled everything together nicely.
Good job :)
I think your main idea is really good. You have added the main points to what triggered WWII. I think on the line 'Spread Europe with a think layer of an appeasement' take out the an, it will make it sound more powerful. That is the main thing that you should fix, otherwise it is really good. The bake until golden gives it a more positive side to WWII, maybe you should try changing that to something more dull so it shows the reader the negative side of WWII.
The format you wrote your poem in really gave it more power. You used short words and straight to the point. The cooking WWII really flows well in your poem. I also love the detailed words like Garnish, and pinch.
I especially like the line 'Until brimming with German aggression.
Also, you could put 'and blend slowly' in the same line as 'spread Europe with a thick layer of appeasement.'
Overall you did a fantastic job with your recipe poem.
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